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托福独立写作真题范文 | 同学功课不会做,我帮吗?

2020-10-30

       独立写作题目

  “One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork.

  Which solution would you recommend?

  1) ask you for help

  2) find a professional tutor for help”

  写作范文

  Introduction

  略

  Body

  (示范一:Body部分的第一和第二段)

  The immediate consideration pertains to the knowledge to which the difficulty is related.← 这样的措辞听起来严肃正式,不宜;而更推崇听起来自然的措辞→ Theimmediate consideration is whether I have reliable knowledge to which the difficulty is related. 放入场景里描述(增加篇幅、营造“画面感”):When a classmate has confusion and turns to me for answers, the classmate expects me to be the solution. I may have some knowledge, but I may be uncertain that what I know is true. Also, it is not unlikely that I am confident in my misconceptions and tell them as the truth. Obviously, thepuzzled classmate would not want to take the chances. ← 对比→ By contrast, a professional tutor, on the knowledge level, has better or absolute credibility, since the tutor would not be qualified for the job if he or shewere not competent in knowledge. ← 措辞技巧之一:正话反说

       Even ← 设置让步,形成与上一段的关系 a straight-A peer student, who is always certain and correct about the knowledge, may be unable to provide effective help. The critical inadequacy is the lack of teaching skills. ← 措辞技巧之一:本可以用原因状语从句的部分,故意拆成独立的第二句,从而让第一句中的论断成为hook For example, I am excellent at the grammar of the English language but I am not articulate when I try to explain to a peer student the intricacies in the relationship between the elements. My lack of the ability to effectivelydeliver those ideas makes me no help my classmate needs. ← 对比 → At this point, my classroom should seek help from a professional tutor, who must possess teaching expertise as part of the professional qualification.

  Body

  (示范二:Body部分的第二和第三段)

  I may have the knowledge, but I am a layman in teaching. For example, the classmate may seek my help when he or she encounters mathematical difficulties. Although I excel at solving equations and drawing curves, I cannot offer the help needed, because I have no idea about how my k←←←nowledge can be effectively delivered. I may explain a lot, and little of my explanation helps. At this point, the classmate is advised to find a tutor who has expertise in teaching.

  Even though I may be certain about the knowledge and possess some skills in teaching, I may be the last person the classmate should turn to. The knowledge and skills do not qualify me for the matter, because I may not have adequate patience or strong motivation to offer continued help. Especially when the incentive is lacking, I may quit anytime. ← 形成对比 → In the case of the professional tutor, which is different from mine, it is a job, which pays. At the bare minimum level, which for the sake of money, the professional has to remain patient and is motivated to keep doing the job until it is done. Driven by good work ethics, the professional stays in the job till there is some result.

  Conclusion

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